Nowadays, shopping online is becoming popular because of its benefits. For example, the consumers can buy books, air tickets or anything they need on the Internet. There are many advantages to this phenomenon. Besides, the drawbacks of shopping online are also a problem. In my opinion, the benefits of buying things on the internet outweigh the disadvantages.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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292 words

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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