The chart below shows the percentage of households owning four types of electronic devices between 1995 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the percentage of households owning four types of electronic devices between 1995 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The line graph illustrates the
percentage
level of households with
computer
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computers
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, mobile
phone
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phones
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, MP3
player
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players
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and
tablet
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tablets
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from 1995 to 2015.
Overall
,
it is clear that
popularity
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of all four electronic devices increased over the period,
while
MP3 players that
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the most popular at the beginning became the least favoured in the end.
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Furthermore
, smartphones and computers started and finished
with
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the same level, despite some fluctuations. In 1995, both phones and computers stood at just below 10
percent
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.
However
, mobile phones witnessed a sharp climb
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about 60% between 1995 and 2000.
Following
this
,
this
value gradually rose to 95
percent
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. The number of households owning
computer
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computers
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steadily increased during 20 years and reached the same peak as the
percentage
of families using
smart phones
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smartphones
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in
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at
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the end of the period. Regarding
to
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other types of
techological
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technological
devices, the consumption of
table
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tables
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started only
after
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in approximately 2007 and after that saw a slight increase in
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six years.
Subsequently
,
this
percentage
dramatically grew
up
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to just over 60%,
then
peaked at nearly eight in ten households.
In contrast
, the
percentage
of people with MP3 players slowly rose from 15 to 40%.
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