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The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017.

The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017.
The supplied bar chart illustrates how many mature
people
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 attended
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seven various sports in one region in 1997 and 2017. It can be clearly seen that
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Tennis had the highest
number
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 of adult participation.
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,the mature
people
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 did not prefer to play basketball,which had the least
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 of attending over the period. The
number
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 of
people
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 who chose to play tennis was nearly 55/000 in 2017,compared to 1997 with 50/000 adults.
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 of mature populations who preferred to play Rugby and Football in 2017 was considerably more than
people
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 who liked to play them in 1997 with approximately 50/000 and 30/000,respectively. The
number
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 of
community
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 who tended to go swimming levelled off with roughly 35/000 in 1997 and 2017.
In addition
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,25/000
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mature
people
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 participated in Cricket sports in 1997.Whilst,just under 10/000
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people
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 attended
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Cricket courses in 2017.Surprisingly,the
number
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 of
people
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 who chose to participate in basketball classes in 2017 was significantly more than
people
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 who wanted to play basketball in 1997 with 22/000 and 9/000,respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Participation levels
  • Major sports
  • Noticeable changes
  • General trend
  • Increase/Decrease
  • Stable
  • Sport-specific
  • Popularity
  • Speculate
  • Societal changes
  • Technological impact
  • Growth in sports culture
  • Influential events
  • Prediction
  • Future trends
  • Data analysis
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