In many countries, the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue can be solved?

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numbers
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of nations, where habitation is decreasing day
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new inventions could be the greatest
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reason
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reason and the possible solution that will reduce the risk of deforestation.
Firstly
,
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devices harm natural
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habitats
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. Rays passing through
the
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gadgets
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as mobile phones play a vital role
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the environment. To elaborate, the usage of cell phones
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quite high
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to
last
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decade. Everyone has communication devices nowadays
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whether
weather
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is a
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or mature.
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,
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of the network is
also
improved which will impact
sevearly
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severely
on birds and forest
area
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.
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,
5
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G (5th Generation) network announced a couple of years ago,
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made
birds
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life
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miserable. only half of the habitat left as
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to 2020 data.
Thus
, no doubt new
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assist human life
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comfortable
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and
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luxury
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drawbacks on wildlife can not be avoided. Moving forward to the solution, awareness can be a way to overcome
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concequences
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consequences
consequence
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Government
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of the States can help society
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some programs which will spread knowledge about
merits
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the merits
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and demerits of technology. To explain
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, individuals are unaware
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the new goods and
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materials.
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published in the Times India newspaper, 70
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of the population
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no knowledge
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introduction conclusion present
Your essay should begin with a clear introduction and end with a conclusion. Summarize the key points you will discuss and then revisit them at the end of the essay.
logical structure
Make sure each main point in your essay directly supports your thesis statement. Use clear topic sentences to introduce each paragraph.
supported main points
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complete response
You've correctly identified that technological advancements can have negative effects on wildlife.
relevant specific examples
Using real-world examples such as the impact of 5G on birds shows a good attempt to incorporate relevant specific examples.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • urbanization
  • deforestation
  • agricultural expansion
  • pollution control
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable practices
  • overexploitation
  • invasive species
  • conservation
  • quarantine measures
  • eradication programs
  • public awareness campaigns
  • habitat destruction
  • climate change
  • natural habitats
  • species decline
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