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The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2000 to travel to and from school using different types mode of transport. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2000 to travel to and from school using different types mode of transport. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates how many young people visited to and from school by five various types of transportation in two years (1990 and 2000).
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the popularity of all modes of transport decreased
by
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over
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 time, with the notable exception of
car
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the car
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, which became the most favoured over the period. In terms of vehicle transport, the number of children
travelled
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travelling
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 to and from
scholl
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school
 by car was 4
million
,
however
,
this
 value dramatically rose in 20 years and reached a peak of just over 12
million
, which made
this
 type of transportation
as
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apply
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the leader in 2010.
In contrast
, the level of bus usage, which was the most popular choice in 1990, halved in
following
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the following
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 two decades. In regard to other methods of transportation, walking and cycling options were at
same
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the same
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 level of 6
million
 in the beginning, but travelling on foot saw a significant drop of 50% in 2010.
This
 trend was followed by bicycle transport, which
experinced
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experienced
 a sharp fall of one-third in
next
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the next
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 twenty years.
Furthermore
, the
amount
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number
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 of pupils
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who preferred
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preferred
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who preferred
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 both bus and cycling was 7
million
 and after
than
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then
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 went down to 5
million
.
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