The first chart below shows the number of British visitors to the US and American visitors to the UK from 2011 to 2015. The second chart shows the amount spent by those visitors in that period.
The left bar graph shows
that
the Correct word choice
apply
amount
of Change the quantifier
number
British
people
to
the US and American Change preposition
in
people
to
the UK for Change preposition
in
traveling
between 2011 and 2015. The right one shows Change the spelling
travelling
that
total Correct determiner usage
the
amount
of their spending by those visitors in the same period.
Regarding the number of visitors in two
countries, Correct article usage
the two
British
travelers
have consistently Change the spelling
travellers
more
visited Correct quantifier usage
apply
US
over the Correct article usage
the US
whold
period. Correct your spelling
whole
hold
However
, its number fluctuated around 3 millions
and 3.5 Change to singular
million
millions
. Meanwhile, about 2.5 Change to singular
million
millions
and over 3 Change to singular
million
millions
American travelers visited Change to singular
million
UK
. Those figures both peaked at 3.5 Correct article usage
the UK
millions
and 3.3 Change to singular
million
millions
, respectively, in 2015.
In terms of spending, Change to singular
million
British
tourists generally spent $4 billion US dollars in three consecutive years (2011, 2012, 2013). However
, it started to skyrocketed
significantly Change the verb
skyrocket
from
2014, reaching almost $6 billion US dollars in Change preposition
in
following
year. Add an article
the following
Similarly
, the amount
spent by American people
stagnated from 2011 to 2013, with figures of around $3 billion dollars, but increased gradually by 2014.
The two bar graphs clearly demonstrate that the number of UK and US tourists didn’t experience a substantial increases
between 2011 and 2015. Correct the article-noun agreement
a substantial increase
substantial increases
However
, it is notable that the amount
spent of
Change preposition
by
British
people
soared sharply over the period.Submitted by jb22809467 on
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