The first chart below shows the number of British visitors to the US and American visitors to the UK from 2011 to 2015. The second chart shows the amount spent by those visitors in that period.

The first chart below shows the number of British visitors to the US and American visitors to the UK from 2011 to 2015. The second chart shows the amount spent by those visitors in that period.
The left bar graph shows
that
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the
amount
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number
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of
British
people
to
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the US and American
people
to
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in
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the UK for
traveling
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travelling
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between 2011 and 2015. The right one shows
that
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total
amount
of their spending by those visitors in the same period. Regarding the number of visitors in
two
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the two
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countries,
British
travelers
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travellers
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have consistently
more
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visited
US
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the US
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over the
whold
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whole
hold
period.
However
, its number fluctuated around 3
millions
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and 3.5
millions
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million
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. Meanwhile, about 2.5
millions
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and over 3
millions
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American travelers visited
UK
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the UK
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. Those figures both peaked at 3.5
millions
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and 3.3
millions
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million
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, respectively, in 2015. In terms of spending,
British
tourists generally spent $4 billion US dollars in three consecutive years (2011, 2012, 2013).
However
, it started to
skyrocketed
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significantly
from
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in
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2014, reaching almost $6 billion US dollars in
following
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year.
Similarly
, the
amount
spent by American
people
stagnated from 2011 to 2013, with figures of around $3 billion dollars, but increased gradually by 2014. The two bar graphs clearly demonstrate that the number of UK and US tourists didn’t experience
a substantial increases
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a substantial increase
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between 2011 and 2015.
However
, it is notable that the
amount
spent
of
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by
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British
people
soared sharply over the period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, british, people, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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