In order to be successful in sports, some people think you have to be physically strong. Others say that mental strength is more important. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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Sports

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plays a crucial role in

people

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than ever before. Some say that

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a successful

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should be fit physically

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others believe that mental

strength

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is a vital point of being a successful person in

sports

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viewpoints

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victory

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person in

sports

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. On the one hand, sportsmen should be physically strong in order to they can give

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fight to the

neeother

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other

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can easily

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their battle.

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means, some

sports

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need

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physical fitness for running

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and jumping

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being overweight faces

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all these activities.

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famous

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sports

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of cricket

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physicial

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physical

fitness and

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because

players

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should run around

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huge size grounds. Needless to say

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, being physically strong brings more benefits to

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athletes

to succeed in

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, mental

strength

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is of the utmost importance for

players

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on the grounds they face

win

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loss

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in their

sports

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carrer

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career

, so they should need the mental

strength

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to calm their

ind

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mind

from depression and stress.

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mental

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because mental

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strength

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can help

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the

players

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not

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aggressively

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inthe

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the

ground and the opposite team

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fscing

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facing

rumers

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rumours

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sportsmen's

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performance

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which

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sports

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people should ignore

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them

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otherwise

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their actual

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will be

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and some

players

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might be replaced. Henceforth,

sportmen

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sportsmen

should need mental

stablity

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stability

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strength

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to give better

performance

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sports

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. In conclusion,

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, having a

pysicial

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physical

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fitness body can lead to

play

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easaily

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easily

without facing any difficulties in

sports

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competitons

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competitions

, mental

strength

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and stability can help to bring better

performance

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to sportsmen and

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the

allegation

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and rumors.

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, I

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grammar

Pay attention to various grammatical errors, such as verb forms, prepositions, and articles. For example, correcting 'lot ofdifficulties' to 'a lot of difficulties' or 'a famous sports of cricket' to 'the famous sport of cricket.'

clarity

Make sure all sentences are clear and easy to follow. For example, 'Sports plays a crucial role in people lives tremendousky than ever before' could be rephrased as 'Sports play a more crucial role in people's lives than ever before.'

depth

Expand and elaborate on your points to make your arguments richer. For instance, you could provide more detailed examples or add a few sentences to further explain your points.

introduction

Your introduction clearly states the topic and presents both views effectively. This makes it easy for the reader to understand what will be discussed.

conclusion

You have included a conclusion that summarizes the key points discussed in the essay, ensuring that the essay has a clear ending.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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