In order to be successful in sports, some people think you have to be physically strong. Others say that mental strength is more important. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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Sports
plays a crucial role in
people
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lives
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tremendously
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than ever before. Some say that
being
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a successful
athletes
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should be fit physically
while
others believe that mental
strength
is a vital point of being a successful person in
sports
.
This
essay discusses both
viewponts
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viewpoints
and I think these two aspects should
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to
being
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a
victory
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person in
sports
. On the one hand, sportsmen should be physically strong in order to they can give
tough
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fight to the
neeother
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other
sportsmen,
besides
can easily
loss
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their battle.
This
means, some
sports
need
a
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physical fitness for running
,
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and jumping
while
being overweight faces
lot
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ofdifficulties
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of difficulties
to do
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in doing
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all these activities.
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,
a
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famous
sports
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sport
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of cricket
should need
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a
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apply
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physicial
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physical
fitness and
strong
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strength
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because
players
should run around
the
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apply
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huge size grounds. Needless to say
that
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, being physically strong brings more benefits to
athlets
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athletes
to succeed in
sports
.
On the other hand
, mental
strength
is of the utmost importance for
players
on the grounds they face
win
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wins
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an
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and
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loss
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losses
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in their
sports
carrer
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career
, so they should need the mental
strength
to calm their
ind
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mind
from depression and stress.
This
is,
mental
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because mental
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strength
can help
to
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the
players
not
being
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be
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aggressively
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on inthe
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inthe
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the
ground and the opposite team
players
.
For instance
,
fscing
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facing
rumers
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rumours
and allegations of
sportmen's
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sportsmen's
rts
performance
,
which
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sports
people should ignore
all
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of
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them
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otherwise
their actual
performance
will be
worst
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worse
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and some
players
might be replaced. Henceforth,
sportmen
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sportsmen
should need mental
stablity
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stability
and
strength
to give better
performance
in
sports
. In conclusion,
although
, having a
pysicial
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physical
physician
fitness body can lead to
play
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playing
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easaily
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easily
without facing any difficulties in
sports
competitons
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competitions
, mental
strength
and stability can help to bring better
performance
to sportsmen and
ignores
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ignore
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the
allegation
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allegations
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and rumors.
Therefore
, I
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grammar
Pay attention to various grammatical errors, such as verb forms, prepositions, and articles. For example, correcting 'lot ofdifficulties' to 'a lot of difficulties' or 'a famous sports of cricket' to 'the famous sport of cricket.'
clarity
Make sure all sentences are clear and easy to follow. For example, 'Sports plays a crucial role in people lives tremendousky than ever before' could be rephrased as 'Sports play a more crucial role in people's lives than ever before.'
depth
Expand and elaborate on your points to make your arguments richer. For instance, you could provide more detailed examples or add a few sentences to further explain your points.
introduction
Your introduction clearly states the topic and presents both views effectively. This makes it easy for the reader to understand what will be discussed.
conclusion
You have included a conclusion that summarizes the key points discussed in the essay, ensuring that the essay has a clear ending.
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