The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the
quantity
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number
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of
visitors
who
traveled
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travelled
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to
Brighton
, the
UK
, during
this
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the
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7 years from 2009 and 2016.
Overall
the total
numbers
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number
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of
the
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apply
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tourists visiting
Brighton
, the
Uk
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UK
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increased year by year
Besides
, the
number
of
the
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apply
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visitors
that
staying
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stayed
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on
cruise
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a cruise
the cruise
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ship
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ships
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was fewer than the people who
choose
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chose
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to stay on
island
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the island
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According to
diagram
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the diagram
a diagram
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, in 2009, the total
number
of visitor who
traveled
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travelled
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to
Brighton
the
Uk
was 2
million
approximately 1.5
million
people staying on the stand,
however
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however,
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the others staying at
cruise
ships. Over the period from 2010 to 2011,the
number
of
visitors
staying on
cruise
ships dramatically dropped
reached
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reaching
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its bottom
just
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of just
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under 0.5
million
, but there was an upward trend in
number
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the number
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of those who
staying
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stayed
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on
island
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the island
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In the 5 years spanning from 2011 through
2016
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2016,
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the
number
of
the
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apply
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visitors
traveled
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travelling
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to
Brighton
the
Uk
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UK
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sharply went up to 7
million
.
Furthermore
, the
number
of tourists staying on
cruise
ships rapidly increases to
4million
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4 million
surpass
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surpassing
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those who staying on the island (
3million
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3 million
)
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, brighton, uk, number, cruise, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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