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Nowadays, it is possible for both scientists and tourists to go to explore natural environments that are far away from the place where they live, such as the South Pole. This essay will discuss the benefits and the drawbacks of this development.

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 development,
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human's
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 curiosity brings
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impressive thought,
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researchers
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 and
travelers
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 intention to discover natural environments,
such
 as the South
Pole
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This
 essay will elaborate on the arguments concerning
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 and disadvantages of
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 the tourists.
Firstly
, some
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 might
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 for those who
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to
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rare natural places like
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the South
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Pole
. But in fact, even
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 journey took
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sophisticated
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remain
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 proven that
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technology
 is not well-implemented with the actual South
Pole
's climate and conditions.
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 lower temperature is the main reason
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dysfunction
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high cost and expensive tools
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 needed to
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 and
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 in
this
 place.
Subsequently
,
besides
 the
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disadvantages
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 things that have been explained above, the researchers and
travelers
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travellers
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 believe that exploring
this
 rare place has
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benefit
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benefits
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.
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people successfully
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 and
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 in
this
 place, they will discover new findings that important for
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knowledges
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practical advanced
technology
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this
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for
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 exploring
the
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natural environments
such
 as the South
Pole
.
Therefore
, in the future, it is important for people
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to
developing
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 the newest and sophisticated infrastructure for adapting
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 rare conditions to reach
an amazing findings
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task response
Revise the introduction to clearly state the advantages and disadvantages to be discussed.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has one clear main idea, supported by relevant details and examples.
coherence and cohesion
Focus on sentence structure and grammar to improve clarity and coherence of the writing.
relevant specific examples
Provide specific and relevant examples to support the points made, especially in the advantages and disadvantages sections.
task achievement
The essay presents a clear response to the task, discussing both benefits and drawbacks of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the discussed points and provides a forward-looking statement.
coherence and cohesion
The main points are logically organized into separate paragraphs, aiding overall coherence.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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