In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless, The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless outweight the disadvantages?

While
it is widely claimed that the absence of the driver for four wheel-vehicles
such
as
cars
, buses and trucks will
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in the
futures
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, others argue that
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could either
offerring
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offer
more
time
or
disrupting
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specific jobs to
be vanished
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. Both
point
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of
views
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and personal opinion toward
this
debatable topic will be elaborated on in
this
essay.
To begin
with, it may
seems
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sensible for some to believe that
driverless
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era of
cars
will provide numerous benefits, especially
time
for other activities.
This
is
possibly
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because other productivities
such
as working, napping, or even
eatting
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eating
could
happened
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if the
time
for driving is replaced. Take office
worker
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workers
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,
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; they
tended
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to spend about 4 hours on average
for
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driving back and forth from home to
workplace
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the workplace
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which could be
such
a waste of
time
spending
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on
a
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road just to drive. If
driverless
schemes
is
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widespread,
it
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they
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can
aiding
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us in using
time
more productive as
time
in
todays'
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world is the most precious
keys
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. Many
opponent
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of
this
idea might
opposed
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that
this
could lead to a disruption of jobs, to be specific, the drivers.
To simply
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explain,
if
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that if
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driverless
vehicles
is emerged
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,
this
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positions will no longer needed.
As a result
, the drivers will be laid off and need to find other jobs
instead
.
For instance
,
this
could greatly impact
on
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the
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low-income families whose career opportunities
is
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limited as driving requires only hands-on skills rather than academic performances which most of them hardly
persued
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.
However
, I personally argue in favour of
its
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negative effects of
driverless
cars
seeing that they still lack
of
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appropriate
decision making
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on
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some unexpected
situation
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situations
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that
not
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are not
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programmed. Though there is
a
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research collated on the statistics of
driverless
cars
reduces
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reducing
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rate
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the rate
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of road accidents related
with
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human-error
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, it is impossible for
the
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system that
programmed
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is programmed
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to account for one situation both safely and ethically at the same
time
. In a nutshell,
although
it is undeniable that
driverless
car
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cars
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could be
beneficials
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beneficial
for people to become more productive and
using
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time
wisely, I am of the opinion that
it
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detrimental effects
outweight
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outweigh
its
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their
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postive
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positive
outcomes and
needed
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need
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to be prepared in order to create a safe and efficient scheme.
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coherence cohesion
There are a few grammatical and lexical inaccuracies that can be improved to enhance clarity and coherence. For instance, 'offerring' should be 'offering,' and 'happened' should be 'happen.' Careful proofreading can help minimize such errors.
coherence cohesion
Stronger transitions between paragraphs and ideas can help improve the logical flow of your essay. For example, using phrases like 'Moreover,' 'Additionally,' or 'Conversely' can guide the reader more smoothly through your argument.
task achievement
Support your points with more specific examples and relevant details. For example, include data on how much time driverless cars could actually save for average commuters or discuss specific studies if possible.
task achievement
Elaborate slightly more on both the advantages and disadvantages to provide a more balanced perspective. This approach will showcase your ability to present a comprehensive view on the subject matter.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure, with a well-defined introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
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You have addressed both sides of the argument, which shows a thorough understanding of the topic.
task achievement
The use of examples, such as the impact on office workers and low-income families, helps to contextualize your points and make them more convincing.

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