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Band 5.5

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless, The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless outweight the disadvantages?

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While
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 it is widely claimed that the absence of the driver for four wheel-vehicles
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cars
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, buses and trucks will
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 in the
futures
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, others argue that
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this innovations
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 could either
offerring
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offer
 more
time
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 or
disrupting
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 specific jobs to
be vanished
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. Both
point
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 of
views
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 and personal opinion toward
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To begin
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 with, it may
seems
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 sensible for some to believe that
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driverless
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the driverless
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 era of
cars
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 will provide numerous benefits, especially
time
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 for other activities.
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 is
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 because other productivities
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 as working, napping, or even
eatting
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eating
 could
happened
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 if the
time
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 for driving is replaced. Take office
worker
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workers
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,
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; they
tended
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 to spend about 4 hours on average
for
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driving back and forth from home to
workplace
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the workplace
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 which could be
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 a waste of
time
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spending
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 on
a
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the
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 road just to drive. If
driverless
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 schemes
is
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 widespread,
it
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they
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 can
aiding
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aid
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 us in using
time
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 more productive as
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 in
todays'
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today's
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 world is the most precious
keys
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. Many
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opponents
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 of
this
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 idea might
opposed
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argue
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 that
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 could lead to a disruption of jobs, to be specific, the drivers.
To simply
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 explain,
if
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driverless
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 vehicles
is emerged
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,
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this
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these
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 positions will no longer needed.
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, the drivers will be laid off and need to find other jobs
instead
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.
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,
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 could greatly impact
on
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the
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low-income families whose career opportunities
is
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 limited as driving requires only hands-on skills rather than academic performances which most of them hardly
persued
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.
However
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, I personally argue in favour of
its
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 negative effects of
driverless
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cars
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 seeing that they still lack
of
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appropriate
decision making
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on
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 some unexpected
situation
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situations
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 that
not
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 programmed. Though there is
a
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research collated on the statistics of
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cars
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reduces
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rate
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the rate
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 of road accidents related
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human-error
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human error
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, it is impossible for
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 system that
programmed
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 to account for one situation both safely and ethically at the same
time
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. In a nutshell,
although
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 it is undeniable that
driverless
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car
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cars
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 could be
beneficials
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beneficial
 for people to become more productive and
using
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time
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 wisely, I am of the opinion that
it
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their
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 detrimental effects
outweight
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outweigh
its
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postive
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positive
 outcomes and
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 to be prepared in order to create a safe and efficient scheme.

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coherence cohesion
There are a few grammatical and lexical inaccuracies that can be improved to enhance clarity and coherence. For instance, 'offerring' should be 'offering,' and 'happened' should be 'happen.' Careful proofreading can help minimize such errors.
coherence cohesion
Stronger transitions between paragraphs and ideas can help improve the logical flow of your essay. For example, using phrases like 'Moreover,' 'Additionally,' or 'Conversely' can guide the reader more smoothly through your argument.
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Support your points with more specific examples and relevant details. For example, include data on how much time driverless cars could actually save for average commuters or discuss specific studies if possible.
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Elaborate slightly more on both the advantages and disadvantages to provide a more balanced perspective. This approach will showcase your ability to present a comprehensive view on the subject matter.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure, with a well-defined introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
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You have addressed both sides of the argument, which shows a thorough understanding of the topic.
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The use of examples, such as the impact on office workers and low-income families, helps to contextualize your points and make them more convincing.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomous vehicles
  • driverless technology
  • road safety
  • human error
  • traffic flow
  • congestion
  • real-time data
  • cost benefits
  • fuel consumption
  • vehicle maintenance
  • mobility
  • cyber-attacks
  • technical failures
  • infrastructure adaptations
  • ethical considerations
  • moral responsibility
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