IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

Most agree that schools should be training children to recycle waste to preserve the Earth's natural resources. However, some believe that it is parents who should teach their children to recycle waste while others feel schools are more responsible. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Although
Linking Words
 many individuals believe that teaching youngsters to recycle trash to preserve the ecosystem is
school's
Correct article usage
the school's
show examples
responsibility
Use synonyms
, others think that
parents
Use synonyms
 should encourage their kids to learn that. I completely concur that it is a shared
responsibility
Use synonyms
 between both schools and
parents
Use synonyms
.
Firstly
Linking Words
, the education system has the ability to provide
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
suitable tools that can aid in teaching
children
Use synonyms
 how to recycle
waste
Use synonyms
 products. Teachers can implement several methods that can enable students to learn
while
Linking Words
 they are studying. One of the effective ways is to substitute trash containers all over the school with recycling ones.
This
Linking Words
 will encourage
children
Use synonyms
 to use those containers effectively
while
Linking Words
 they are imitating their tutors. To give an illustration, an education facility in Egypt started to instruct their pupils on how to recycle
waste
Use synonyms
 after that, the youngsters started to imitate their teachers.
Furthermore
Linking Words
,
parents
Use synonyms
 have a great influence on their kids, so they can instruct them effectively. Youngsters look to their fathers and mothers as role models, so they try to copy their actions. If
parents
Use synonyms
 started to recycle
waste
Use synonyms
 products, young people would do the same thing. Another reason is that
children
Use synonyms
 interact with their family for a long time during the day, so they can learn by watching their
parents
Use synonyms
 without any effort. All in all, learning how to recycle
waste
Use synonyms
 from
parents
Use synonyms
 is an easy method, and does not require effort.
To conclude
Linking Words
, even though some people think that schools carry the burden of teaching
children
Use synonyms
 how to process
waste
Use synonyms
 , not the
parents
Use synonyms
'
responsibility
Use synonyms
, I completely believe that it is a shared
responsibility
Use synonyms
 between the education system and the nuclear family.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

structure
Plan your essay. Say your view at the start and give one idea per paragraph.
language
Use simple, exact words. Replace long phrases with short ones.
cohesion
Link ideas with clear words like however, but, also, and so to show thought.
examples
Give one well explained example for each point and avoid too much detail.
vocabulary
Keep same words for recycle and waste and small mistakes in spelling.
task response
Clear view is shown and you say it is shared.
coherence
You try to give an example and a reason.
organization
There is an order: intro, body, end.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: