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The diagram below displays how the instant noodles are produced.

The diagram below displays how the instant noodles are produced.
The given process diagram illustrates
manufacturing
Correct article usage
the manufacturing
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 of instant spaghettis.
Overall
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, there are
few
Correct article usage
a few
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 ingredients(flour, water, oil, vegetables and species), some equipment and some stages in
minute
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the minute
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 noodles manufacturing process.
Firstly
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, flour transports from storage silos to the factory. Transported flour
mix
Wrong verb form
mixed
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 with water and oil in the mixer and go throw roller to get
dough
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 sheets. After that
stages
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stage
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, gotten
dough
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 sheets need to be cut to get
dough
Use synonyms
 strips.
At
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In
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fifth
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the fifth
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 step
dough
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 strips go through the part of
apparat
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the apparat
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 and
comes
Correct subject-verb agreement
come
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 out as noodle discs.
At
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In
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 the next stage, spaghetti discs
cook
Wrong verb form
are cooked
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on
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in
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 oil and dry, after which cooked and dried noodle discs
put
Add a missing verb
are put
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 into cups.
At
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In
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seventh
Correct article usage
the seventh
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 step, vegetables and species
put
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are put
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 into cups. The
last
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 stage is labelling and sealing. Cups with macaroni and vegetables have to be
labeled
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labelled
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 and sealed. After that, ready instant noodles transfer to malls and shops.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dough with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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