A tendency of news reported in the media about problems and emergencies rather than positive developments is more harmful to the individual and to society. Do you agree or disagree?
Reporting about problems and emergency situations more than good negative view of the future and put them in a dark state of mind that
news
have
a huge negative Correct subject-verb agreement
has
impacts
on the nation. Correct the article-noun agreement
impact
However
, this
essay totally agree
with Change the verb form
agrees
this
statment
and will illustrate how negative Correct your spelling
statement
news
effect
individual minds and Correct your spelling
affects
destory
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destroys
the
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apply
people
trust.
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people's
Due to
a variety of social media platforms these days, it becomes easily
to spread Replace the word
easier
news
among society and the most attracting
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attractive
news
for people
are
about kidnapping or homicide which Correct subject-verb agreement
is
make
it Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
fsat
to be heard by everyone. Correct your spelling
easy
For example
, alot
of Correct your spelling
a lot
usres
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users
in
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on
facebook
are posting ,the trend in Egypt Capitalize word
Facebook
this
week it
is a boy killed his sister with a knife Correct pronoun usage
apply
infront
of their buildingCorrect your spelling
in front
,
because he saw her out with a boyfriend, Remove the comma
apply
This
phenomina
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phenomenon
effects
the relationship between brothers and sisters and can lead to mistrust eachothers. Replace the word
affects
Moreover
,the child kidnapping stories make familes
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families
in
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apply
a
paranoid state of any stranger Correct article usage
apply
come
close to their baby and Wrong verb form
coming
this
overreact
resulting Replace the word
overreaction
unstable
person full of Correct article usage
an unstable
fears
and anxiety.
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fear
On the other hand
, whatching
and reading about tragic stories may cause depression and Correct your spelling
watching
lose
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loss
interest
in normal life Change preposition
of interest
activity
. Fix the agreement mistake
activities
Such
as young people
were
reading about wars and Unnecessary verb
apply
watch
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watching
dozen
of dead Fix the agreement mistake
dozens
people
it
would make them haveCorrect pronoun usage
which
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a
slow
down their progress in Wrong verb form
slowed
shcool
and life. Correct your spelling
school
For instance
, elementry
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elementary
student
read about Fix the agreement mistake
students
2023
attack on Palestine and whatch how the Correct article usage
the 2023
people
killed
in their Add a missing verb
were killed
home
and Fix the agreement mistake
homes
chilldren
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children
losing
their families, houses Wrong verb form
lost
destroyed
by bombs in the Add a missing verb
were destroyed
middel
of the night. That Correct your spelling
middle
make
him depressed and sad.
In conclusion, the Change the verb form
makes
empact
of negative Correct your spelling
impact
news
can effect
and change the life of each member of the society.Correct your spelling
affect
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coherence cohesion
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The essay effectively addresses the task by focusing on the negative impacts of predominantly negative news.
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