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The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates how many
traveler
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travelers
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coming
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came
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 to the National
Gallery
, Victoria and Albert
Museum
, and the British
Museum
 over a six-year
period
 from 2007 to 2012.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the National
Gallery
 and the British
Museum
 hit their highest
number
 of guests in 2012, as both
number
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numbers
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 of visitors tended to increase throughout the
period
.
According to
 the data, the National
Gallery
 served an increasing
number
 of
travelers
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travellers
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 every year, except in 2011. The
number
 rose up from around 6 million visitors in 2007, to more than double over the
period
 of six years.
Similarly
, the
number
 of guests coming to the British
Museum
 tended to increase as well, albeit not as much as the growth in the National
Gallery
, by around 2 million people six years later.
On the other hand
, the
number
 of
travelers
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travellers
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 coming to
Victoria
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the Victoria
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 and Albert
Museum
 showed a downward trend during the six-year
period
. Started at around 14 million tourists
coming
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in 2007, it fell
down
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apply
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by one-third
at the end
 of the
period
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gallery, museum, period, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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