The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates how many
traveler
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coming
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came
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to the National
Gallery
, Victoria and Albert
Museum
, and the British
Museum
over a six-year
period
from 2007 to 2012.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the National
Gallery
and the British
Museum
hit their highest
number
of guests in 2012, as both
number
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of visitors tended to increase throughout the
period
.
According to
the data, the National
Gallery
served an increasing
number
of
travelers
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every year, except in 2011. The
number
rose up from around 6 million visitors in 2007, to more than double over the
period
of six years.
Similarly
, the
number
of guests coming to the British
Museum
tended to increase as well, albeit not as much as the growth in the National
Gallery
, by around 2 million people six years later.
On the other hand
, the
number
of
travelers
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coming to
Victoria
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the Victoria
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and Albert
Museum
showed a downward trend during the six-year
period
. Started at around 14 million tourists
coming
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in 2007, it fell
down
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by one-third
at the end
of the
period
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words gallery, museum, period, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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