Today's society is based on laws and rules. It can't function well if individuals are free to do whatever they want. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

These days, our
society
is
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based
on
under
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the
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rules and regulations. Some say that
society
cannot function properly when
people
have more
freedom
which
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and
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they can do anything. I
stronlgly
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strongly
agree with
this
statement because it creates more crimes and
voilences
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violence
violences
,
this
essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons. To commence with, law and order is the most
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of
society
without following it properly
which
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it
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can bring enormous amounts of crimes,
consequently
,
people
will
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their possessions,
assests
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assets
and
jewelleries
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jewellery
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, which many
thiefs
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thieves
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and culprits are brought by over
freedom
of the population. No one wants to go work and earn money for their
livinglihood
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livelihood
instead
of they can easily
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wealth from others.
For example
, the USA has
more
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crime rates than any other
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nations
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because of the
over
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freedom
and the laws are more comfortable for the culprits.
Hence
, laws should be followed by the public
besides
crime rates
are
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increased tremendously.
Furthermore
, unstrict laws bring
voilences
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violence
violences
among the
popualtion
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population
, everyone might be ruled
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nations and
attacking to
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attack
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others without any intentions, which
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they are
the
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powerful persons. Increasing the
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ratio and many might be killed by them,
innnocents
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innocent
innocents
people
also
suffer to
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.
For instance
, many African
nation's folks
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nations
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are killed the other parts of the world
people
when
tehy
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they
enter
in
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their
forest
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forests
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and island
area
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because they do not adhere
any
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to any
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rules and regulations. Henceforth, liberal legal acts might
be increased
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increase
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the
violences
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violence
acts of violence
outbreaks of violence
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among the public. In conclusion, law and order
is
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of the utmost importance
of
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every
society
, if do not follow these acts properly it creates
more
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higher
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crimes
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crime
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rates and a large number of
the
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people
might be affected
as well as
it
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apply
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increases
more violences
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violence
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among the population.
Therefore
, I strongly agree with
this
statement because
over
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freedom
can bring more detrimental effects on
society
.
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