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The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.

The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.
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The illustrated line graph provides the amount of travel agency applications in
United
Correct article usage
the United
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 Kingdom during
six
Correct determiner usage
a
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months
Correct your spelling
six-month
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 period.
This
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 information is measured in numbers. Looking at
an
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the
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overall
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 structure, it is obvious that the indicators of the
in person
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in-person
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 and
by telephone
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by-telephone
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 petitions are observed an increase,
while
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 the number of
by
Change preposition
apply
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letter
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letters
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 is registered a reduction. The amount of the first and second mentioned is a sharp growth, wheres the quantity of other is observed a
gradually
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gradual
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 decline.
Initially
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, we should note that the rate of in person, which accounted for 400 in January,
it
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apply
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continued to rise gradually, the highest was more than 1800 in June. In terms of the rate of by telephone is registered in about 900 in the first month, but had remained stable in March-April with 1000, and
then
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had risen
Wrong verb form
rose
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 to 1600 in June. When it comes to the amount of
letter
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letters
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is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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constituted from
january
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January
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 to July 800-700-600-500-400, respectively.
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, the figure
of
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for
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 email is constant more or less 390 in May-June.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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