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Write at least 150 words. The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words. The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 line chart depicts
a
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the
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 resettlements of people from
a
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the
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 countryside to
a big cities
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big cities
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 in three countries - Iran, Indonesia, and Russia. At first glance, we can see that
the
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in all of these country is
the
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a
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 strong
tendence
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tendency
of moving
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to move
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of
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apply
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the population to
an
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apply
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urban areas. These three countries can be divided into two groups.
First,
the group of significant
rising
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of
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in
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 the city population
, contents
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consists of
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 Iran and Russia.
And the
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 first place in
this
 group
belong
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belongs
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 to Iran, which started in 2000 with the smallest quantity of people living in the cities - 8
millons
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million
, nowadays reached the number of 80
millions
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million
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, and
would
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will
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growth
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grow
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up
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apply
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to 95
millions
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million
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 in 2025 (in accordance with the forecast).
Furthermore
, Russia,
that
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which
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 started with
much
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a much
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 bigger city population of 15
millions
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million
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 in 2000, would obtain smaller numbers in 2025
according to
 prediction - only 88
millions
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million
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 in 2025. The second group of
onl
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only
one
 one country - Indonesia -
starte
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started
start
 in 2000 with 10 million
of
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apply
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urbans' residences. After that, it was
the
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a
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 stable
increasing
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increase
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due to
 the two decades up to 2020, that Indonesia had reached the number of 30 million
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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urban citizens, and
due to
 the forecast,
thisnumber
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this number
the number
 will stay unchanged in the future.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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