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The bar chart shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart
depict
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 the transport preferences among young people in the
Uk
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UK
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,United
States
 ,
France
,and Italy.
Overall
 it is
caler
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clear
 that the car most
use
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,in Italy was the
highist percentges
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highest percentage
 75%
while
 the
UK
 and
United
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the United
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States
 60%similar trend
France
 was the
lawest
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lowest
latest
 use
in
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 cars. Regarding
to
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the bicycle
France
 was the
highist
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highest
 45% used
aftar
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after
that
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the
UK
 became the second one
in
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 30%
while
United
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the United
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States
 and Italy
10
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were 10
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% and 15%.
Allthrough
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All through
Although
 the
motocycle
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motorcycle
 the les
ues
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use
 of them the
highist
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highest
 number 30%in United
States
whlie
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while
 in the
UK
 ,
France
 and Italy 10%,15%and 5%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, states, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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