The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugarcane, summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relevant

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugarcane, summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relevant
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steps of technology, which is used to produce
sugar
from
sugar
cane
.
This
process includes two phases, together these two stages consist of seven main actions.
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phase is about growing
sugar
cane
,
while
after crushing stages are about manufacturing.
First,
sugar
cane
is raised for twelve to eighteen months before being cut and assembled by workers or using machines. After harvesting, the
sugar
cane
goes through crushing, a process that extracts
juice
essential for the next phase. The following four steps focus on making
sugar
from the extracted
juice
.
However
,
this
juice
is not as clean as we need.
Thus
, it is purified by a limestone cleanser. The filtered substance is
then
heated in an evaporator until the
juice
transforms into syrup, which contains the needed
sugar
crystals and impurities. To separate them, a centrifuge is used.
Finally
, after obtaining the
sugar
crystals, they are dried and cooled to produce ordinary
sugar
.
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