Around the world it is likely that more adults will work from home, and more children will study from home, as computer technology becomes cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this will be a positive or negative deuelopment?

Nowadays,
Technology
has increased in all different fields. People are likely to use
technology
at home, work and everywhere they are able to
use
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use it
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. I believe that
enhancement
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the enhancement
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of
technology
having
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has
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negative
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a negative
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impact on
people
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people's
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life
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as compared to
positive
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a positive
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way. I will explain my views in upcoming paragraphs.
Firstly
, I believe that
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in
technology
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people more
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task achievement
Try to ensure that your response fully addresses the essay question by providing a clear stance and supporting arguments throughout. Elaborate on how technology impacts both the working and studying environments of adults and children, respectively.
coherence cohesion
Organize your paragraphs more effectively by including a clear introduction, main body paragraphs, and conclusion. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea that supports your overall argument, and transitions between paragraphs should be smooth to enhance readability.
task achievement
The essay topic is presented clearly in the introduction, showing that the writer understands the task and its requirements.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • increased productivity
  • reduced commuting time
  • flexibility
  • convenience
  • lack of social interaction
  • potential distractions
  • limited access to resources
  • facilities
  • increased isolation
  • mental health issues
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