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the graph gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in. new zeland between 1901 and 2101

the graph gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in. new zeland between 1901 and 2101
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The line graph indicates the changes in the rate of
birth
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 and death in New Zealand in two centuries.
Overall
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, the
birth
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 figure experiences more fluctuations than the death figure which has an almost continuous rising trend. In 1901, the
birth
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 ratio stood at 20 and had risen to just under 30 by 1911 but suddenly it had reached its highest point with a dramatic increase to around 65 in 1981,
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, after that the
birth
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 figure had a fluctuated decrease and is expected to reach a little more than 40 in 2101. The death trend was slightly under 10 in 1901 and has had a significant growth over the years which is predicted to peak at just below 60 in 2061,
while
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, it will change minimally
at the end
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 of its trend. By 2041, both figures are expected to reach the same rate (about 50) .

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words birth with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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