The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the
number
of local catches and
imports
in Perth, Australia over a 10-year period.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the
number
of local catches
bigger
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is bigger
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than
imports
.
Unit
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are measured in metric
tons
. At the beginning of the period, local catch accounted
2677
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metric
tons
while
imports
only
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were only
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464.5 metric
tons
. The total
number
has significantly increased and doubled in 2007. Following that, in 2009, the total
number
of local
and
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apply
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import
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imports
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was
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apply
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reached
the
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a
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peak which approximately 9000 metric
tons
. Looking at the figures, after 2009 local catches
was
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slightly decreased which was only 6831,4 metric
tons
.
However
, in the same year, the
imports
still increase and remain the same until 2013.
At the end
of the period, the total was only 5814,7 and decreased by approximately 30% from its peak. It is
also
the same for both
imports
and local 5031,9 and 782,7 metric
tons
, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, imports, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.

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