The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.
The given maps illustrate changes
of
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an industrial
area
in the town known as Norbiton between
current
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and planned future development of the site.
Overall
, there are various changes
could
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be observed in the blueprint with the expansion of residential
area
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along with
facilities distributed around the town.
To begin
with,
this
area
is mainly purpose for industrial
site
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which consisted of numerous factories that
lied
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around the circular path at the
center
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of the map and both
side
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of the eastern wings. In the north, there is a large
area
for
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the
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farmland beyond the river,
whereas
in the southern part was the
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with the main road. In regards
with
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, the future developments of the city
aiming
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to convert
this
industrial
area
into a residential zone seeing that the factories are replacing with houses
instead
. There will be new constructions and renovation
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. In terms of new constructions, new paths
had
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created toward the north crossing the river
as
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to connect
this
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two
seperated
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separated
separate
area
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for housing and the farmland
then
moved to the side nearby. Another, towards the northwest, houses around the corner with the Shops below with the medical centre on the opposite. Moving on to the East wings,
School
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will be built
at the end
of the path and a
play ground
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in the middle of
residential
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the residential
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area
can be clearly seen.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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