Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village.
The given map illustrates the development of Chorleywood
village
near London
in
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1868 to 1994.
Overall
, it can be seen that
this
village
already had main roads in the first period given, and followed by
another
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transportation ways alongside the residential housing surrounded by the roads
thoroughout
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throughout
the year studied.
To begin
with, there are three different pathways
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been built throughout the period mentioned. The main roads
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already established in 1868 and mainly served the north and west side of the
village
. Followed by
motorway
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the motorway
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creation in 1979 which existed from south to north
in
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the east side of the town.
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a railway was installed in 1909 to add more varied means of transportation from west to east in the south
area
of the
village
. Regarding to residential
area
in Chorleywood, there is a gradual increase in population.
Innitially
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Initially
,
in
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1868 to 1883 a small housing
area
only
occurred
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in the
center
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of the
village
which
is
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located near
to
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the main road to facilitate the residents
for
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commuting. Moving
to
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1883 to 1922 where houses
was
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built more than twice
than
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that
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it was and situated on the south of the prior housing
area
.
Moreover
,
along with
the development of
motorway
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motorways
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and
railway
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railways
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, the population has increased rapidly spreading mainly on the east side of the
area
studied,
and
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all of which
positioned
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were positioned
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right by the various
type
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types
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of transportation ways from 1922 to 1994.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words village, area with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Steadily
  • Pivotal events
  • Significant change
  • Transportation links
  • Commuter village
  • Residential areas
  • Commercial areas
  • Public facilities
  • Infrastructure
  • Environmental impact
  • Community life
  • Conservation efforts
  • Maintaining character
  • Vicinity
  • Unique aspects
  • Common challenges
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