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The
police
officers patrolling has
the Verb problem
are
epicenter
of discussion a unanimous Change the spelling
epicentre
comclusive
agreement is yet to be achieved . Correct your spelling
conclusive
conclusion
However
, the
Correct article usage
apply
restrict
offenders Replace the word
restricting
is
the best way to reduce Change the verb form
are
crime
Change preposition
by petrolling
petrolling
of Correct your spelling
patrolling
Add an article
the street
street
. In my Fix the agreement mistake
streets
onion
, Correct your spelling
opinion
i
will explain how effective to reduce Change the capitalization
I
the
Correct article usage
apply
crime
by use
offers patrolling the Wrong verb form
using
street
.
To begin
, with
the Change preposition
apply
police
patrolling the street
would reduce the
crimes Correct article usage
apply
esspecially
Correct your spelling
especially
at
Change preposition
in
dangerous
Add an article
the dangerous
Fix the agreement mistake
streets
street
. Then
, in most large of
cities . Change preposition
apply
For instance
, Bangkok
,in Change preposition
in Bangkok
last
year according to
20% Change preposition
apply
increasing
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increased
crime
because there are various street
. Fix the agreement mistake
streets
Whereas
their
can stand to rob people. Correct pronoun usage
they
Thus
, the cumunities
should support Correct your spelling
communities
to help
each other by Verb problem
apply
check
straighter people.
The second most convincing side is, Replace the word
checking
there
are other various effective Correct word choice
that there
method
to plunge Change the wording
methods
crime
. Firstly
, to install the
CCTV cameras on the streets. After that, if anyone does unethical activities, Correct article usage
apply
then
it is easy caught
that person with the help of cameras. Change the verb form
to catch
Furthermore
, government
must Add an article
the government
to
pass a strict rule to restrict people Change the verb form
apply
to commit
Change preposition
from committing
crime
for the first time because of fear of the law. Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
Also
, prison must give strict punishment, afterwards
they do not Correct word choice
and afterwards
crime
again.
In conclusion, those facts which discussed above, I would Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
therefore
argue that although
police
street
track is a prime way to reduce crime
; however
, another method is also
beneficial. Whereas
, government
must take serious action Add an article
the government
on
Change preposition
against
criminal
to drop Fix the agreement mistake
criminals
the
Correct article usage
apply
crime
in the area. hile
patrolling Correct your spelling
while
have
a detrimental effect on offenders. Owing to which thief did not stand there because of the Correct subject-verb agreement
has
police
. Moreover
, they caught many criminals who break
the law, Wrong verb form
broke
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which consequently
consequently
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consequently,
that leads
to Wrong verb form
led
reduce
violence around the area In their countries.Wrong verb form
reduced
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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You have attempted to address both parts of the question, discussing the effectiveness of police patrolling and suggesting other methods.
task achievement
Adding statistics and examples, like the crime rate in Bangkok, adds some degree of support to your argument.
coherence cohesion
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