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The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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, it is clear from the chart the majority of globetrotters liked the National
Gallery
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 and the
British
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Museum
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 was the second choice.
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 travellers showed less interest in the
Victoria
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 and
Albert
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Museum
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 in these years. It is conspicuous that the interest shown by the explorers 13
million
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, who watched the
Victoria
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Albert
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Museum
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 and the
British
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Museum
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 were in second spot people visited 12
million
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, where the National
Gallery
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 was less choice among all backpackers in 2007. The number of tourists who visited was the same in 2008 with a dramatic reduction took place to travel to the
British
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Museum
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 6
million
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, only the National
Gallery
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 maintained a slight upward trend in 2009 touched 7
million
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. Probing ahead, from 2010, tourists visiting the National
Gallery
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 soared from 11
million
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 to 16
million
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 in 2012, which was the highest among all the museums. The
British
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Museum
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 attracted the globetrotters that were 7
million
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 in 2010 and after that, it abruptly hit 16
million
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 in 2012.
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, the
Victoria
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 and
Albert
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Museum
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 recovered after declining in 2010 and touched 10
million
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 in 2012. The
Victoria
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 and
Albert
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Museum
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also
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 brought revenue for the London Authorities and only
Victoria
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 attracted less as compared to others.

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