The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the total
tourists
Correct quantifier usage
number of tourists

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who visited
in
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London’s three museums from 2007 to 2012 in millions.
Overall
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, it is clear from the chart the majority of globetrotters liked
National
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the National

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Gallery
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and
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British
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the British

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museum
Capitalize word
Museum

The word museum should be capitalized in this context.

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was the second choice.
Whereas
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travellers showed less interest in
Victoria
Correct article usage
the Victoria

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and Albert
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museum
Capitalize word
Museum

The word museum should be capitalized in this context.

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in these years. It is conspicuous that the interest
showed
Wrong verb form
shown

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by the explorers 13
million
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, who watched the Victoria Albert
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museum
Capitalize word
Museum

The word museum should be capitalized in this context.

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and the
British
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Use synonyms

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museum
Capitalize word
Museum

The word museum should be capitalized in this context.

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was in second spot
where
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apply

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people visited 12
million
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, where National
Gallery
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was less choice among all backpackers in 2007. The
tourists
Correct quantifier usage
number of tourists

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visited
Correct pronoun usage
who visited

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were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was

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the same in 2008 with a dramatic reduction took place
travel
Add the particle
to travel

It appears that the verb travel should be in the to-infinitive form. Consider adding the word to.

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to
British
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Use synonyms

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museum
Fix the agreement mistake
museums

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were 6
million
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, only National
Gallery
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maintained
slight
Add an article
a slight

The noun phrase slight upward trend seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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upward trend in 2009 touched
to
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apply

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7
million
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. Probing ahead, from 2010, the travellers increased to visit
National
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the National

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Gallery
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from 11
million
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to 16
million
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in 2012, which was
highest
Correct article usage
the highest

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among all the museums. The
British
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Use synonyms

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museum
Capitalize word
Museum

The word museum should be capitalized in this context.

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attracted the number of globetrotters that were 7
million
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in 2010 and after
that
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that,

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it
increased
Verb problem
apply

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abruptly hit
at
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apply

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16
million
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in 2012.
Furthermore
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, the Victoria and Albert
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Use synonyms

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museum
Capitalize word
Museum

The word museum should be capitalized in this context.

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recovered after
declined
Wrong verb form
declining

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb declined. Consider changing it.

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in 2010 and touched
at
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apply

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10
million
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in 2012.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words gallery, british, museum, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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