The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates the total
tourists
who visited Correct quantifier usage
number of tourists
in
London’s three museums from 2007 to 2012 in millions.
Change preposition
apply
Overall
, it is clear from the chart the majority of globetrotters liked National
Correct article usage
the National
Gallery
and British
Correct article usage
the British
museum
was the second choice. Capitalize word
Museum
Whereas
travellers showed less interest in Victoria
and Albert Correct article usage
the Victoria
museum
in these years.
It is conspicuous that the interest Capitalize word
Museum
showed
by the explorers 13 Wrong verb form
shown
million
, who watched the Victoria Albert museum
and the Capitalize word
Museum
British
museum
was in second spot Capitalize word
Museum
where
people visited 12 Rephrase
apply
million
, where National Gallery
was less choice among all backpackers in 2007. The tourists
Correct quantifier usage
number of tourists
visited
Correct pronoun usage
who visited
were
the same in 2008 with a dramatic reduction took place Correct subject-verb agreement
was
travel
to Add the particle
to travel
British
museum
were 6 Fix the agreement mistake
museums
million
, only National Gallery
maintained slight
upward trend in 2009 touched Add an article
a slight
to
7 Change preposition
apply
million
.
Probing ahead, from 2010, the travellers increased to visit National
Correct article usage
the National
Gallery
from 11 million
to 16 million
in 2012, which was highest
among all the museums. The Correct article usage
the highest
British
museum
attracted the number of globetrotters that were 7 Capitalize word
Museum
million
in 2010 and after that
it Add a comma
that,
increased
abruptly hit Verb problem
apply
at
16 Change preposition
apply
million
in 2012. Furthermore
, the Victoria and Albert museum
recovered after Capitalize word
Museum
declined
in 2010 and touched Wrong verb form
declining
at
10 Change preposition
apply
million
in 2012.Submitted by rbtech65 on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gallery, british, museum, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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