The tables and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed

The tables and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed
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The table given shows the police budget,
while
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the pie charts illustrate where the
money
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was allocated
to
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between 2017 and 2018. The
number of
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police budget is measured in
million
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Pound
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Sterling.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the biggest amount of
money
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was distributed from the National Government.
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, most of the
money
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was spent on
the
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employee salaries. Regarding the police budget
sources
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, it is apparent that the National Government has allocated
their
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money
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in a big
number
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compared to the other means of funding
sources
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, about 175.5 in 2017 and 177.8 in 2018. Compared to the other two funding providers, namely local taxes and other
sources
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like grants
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the total of which can not
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the figure that the prior provider made.
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, the local taxes and other
sources
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only distributed a third and approximately 10% of the total amount
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each
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respectively. In terms of the way the
money
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was spent, about 75% of the
money
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was distributed on officers and staff salaries in 2017, it
then
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saw a slight decrease to 69% in 2018.
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, there was only 8% of the funds allocated
on
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technology in 2017 and 14% in 2018.
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, the
money
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distributed to buildings and transport
were remained
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the same at 17% in both years mentioned.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
Vocabulary: Replace the words money, sources with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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