Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In
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day and age, the
environment
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is always a hotly debated topic. Some individuals argue that the main environmental issue of our time is the disappearance of many kinds of
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and
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.
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, others believe that many other environmental matters are more vital for us to care
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The following essay will discuss both views and give my opinion.
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, many people claim that the loss of particular species of
plants
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and
animals
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is the main problem of the
environment
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. It is not difficult to understand because nowadays a lot of
plants
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and
animals
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are used for commercial or entertainment purposes. So humans are harnessing them excessively and leading to the extinction of many
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and
animals
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.
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, a great deal of tigers and elephants are captured in zoos or circuses with the aim of bringing laughter to everyone,
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, after a long time they will
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die without any other tigers or elephants giving birth.
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, others say that there are more crucial environmental matters. It is not wrong because now our
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is increasingly polluted. It is the consequence of the rising number of vehicles which use fossil fuels and bad awareness of humans.
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, today, people often use cars
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motorbikes or other vehicles which use fossil fuels very much.
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when they operate, they release carbon dioxide and smog into the air and they can be harmful to humans. In conclusion, many individuals say that an important environmental issue is the disappearance of many species.
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, other environmental problems are
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very vital. In my opinion, the extinction of many
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and
animals
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is an essential problem but others like a polluted
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or climate change are
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issues that people need to care about and solve immediately
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lexical resource
Consider using more diverse vocabulary to avoid repetition, such as synonyms for 'important' and 'problem'.
coherence cohesion
Ensure transitions between paragraphs are smoother; try using phrases like 'On the other hand' instead of 'In contrast' to show clear contrasting ideas.
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Include more specific examples or data to more convincingly support your points, especially in the discussion of pollution and fossil fuels.
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Try to elaborate on each main idea a bit more thoroughly, making each paragraph richer with details.
task achievement
The essay addresses both views clearly and provides a balanced discussion.
coherence cohesion
Introduction and conclusion are both well-structured and clearly present the main ideas.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph has a clear main idea, contributing to the overall structure of the essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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