Your child is going on a three-day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter: • Say why you would like to go on the trip • Suggest what you could do to help during the trip • Ask other questions about the trip
Dear Ms. Kaur,
I would like to write a letter to participate in the trip which is held by your school in India.
Firstly
, the main reason to work for this
trip is that I am born in India, therefore
, I can help you to discover places without any issue. Secondly
, I am a nurse who worked as a
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hence
, it would be helpful for medical services during the tour. Last
, but not least, I am doing research on the milestones of toddlers to teenagers, thus
, I would like to work with children.
However
, I have some questions regarding the trip such
as whether is there any cost to pay to reserve?
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Moreover
, could you please share the exact dates and location, so, I can make a plan? Lastly
, is accommodation free or not?
It would be helpful for me. I am eagerly waiting for your response. Thanks in advance.
Yours Sincerely,
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your letter has a clear introductory paragraph where you address the head teacher properly and state your intention to join the trip. The body of your letter should be organized into clear paragraphs, each addressing a different point related to your willingness to help, what you can offer, and your questions about the trip. Finally, conclude your letter politely, expressing anticipation for a response.
task achievement
Your letter somewhat fulfills the task requirements, but lacks detail and specificity in explaining why you would like to join the trip. Expand on your reasons, clearly linking them to the benefits for the trip or pupils. Moreover, while you have suggested your capabilities, they need to be tied in directly to how they can assist during the trip. Also, make sure to specify any other questions you have about the trip as per the task. A slightly more formal tone would be appropriate for writing to a head teacher.