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Band 7.5

You work for a small company. You need to arrange for some time off work. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter: > explain why you want to take time off work > give details of how long you will be away > suggest how you will make up for the lost time

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Dear sir I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you that I am planning to be away from work next month, as I am getting married on November 5th, 2024and it is going to be a destination wedding,
thus
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, I will need extra time to fly to Mumbai, do the ceremony and come back.

 The date of commencement of my leaves is Nov 1st and I will try my best to resume the work on Nov 18th. I made sure everything on my plate is already finished and documentation work is up-to-date, in case of any confusion, they will be handy.
Furthermore
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, I will be available over the mail intermittently,
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, it would not be possible for me to answer the phone calls, I hope you can understand.
 I cordially invite you to my wedding ceremony and give us your blessings. I would be extremely happy with your presence. Please find attached the venue details and timings for your reference.
Thanking
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 you in advance for your cooperation.

 Yours Faithfully, NAT
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suitable writing tone
Ensure the overall tone stays consistent and professional. Although the use of cordial language is appropriate, avoid unnecessary repetition.
complete response
Proofread for small formatting and typographical errors, such as correct punctuation, spacing, and capitalization (e.g., 'November 5th, 2024and' should be 'November 5th, 2024 and').
logical structure
The letter has a clear and logical structure, making it easy for the reader to follow.
single idea per paragraph
Good use of paragraphing helps convey single ideas effectively and maintains coherence.
greeting and closing
The closing is polite and appropriately worded, providing a positive and respectful tone.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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