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nuclear power is far too dangerous, therefore, countries should ban its use and concentrate instead on developing alternative sources such as hydroelectric power and solar energy.to what extent do you agree.

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I strongly agree to a greater
extent
 that nations should outlaw the use of nuclear
energy
 as it is simply too risky and
instead
 focus on creating other
sources
 like solar and hydroelectric electricity because it is clean and affordable
as well as
 renewable.
However
, to a lesser
extent
, l disagree as these
sources
 of
energy
 are affected by drought and weather changes. I agree to a larger
extent
, that countries should forbid nuclear
power
 and enhance the use of other
sources
 because they are cheap.Solar and hydroelectric electricity are very affordable because they are natural resources that come from God as we just need water and sunlight only.
As a result
,
this
 makes them to be better
sources
 than nuclear
energy
.
In addition
,hydropower and
energy
 from the sun are renewable.These two
power
sources
 are always available all the time as they are recycled which allows them to be finer than nuclear
power
.
Furthermore
, sunlight
energy
 and hydropower are clean. These two
sources
 have benefits as they do not produce toxins that cause pollution
also
 that are dangerous to our health.
Nevertheless
,I disagree to a lesser
extent
, because renewable
energy
 from the sun and hydroelectricity have got demerits as it is affected by drought and weather seasons. Seasonal rotation affects natural
sources
 of
energy
 because they will not have adequate resources for them to function
for instance
, At night the amount of
power
 produced by solar radiation is disturbed because of the absence of sunlight. In conclusion, I agree to a greater
extent
, that nuclear
power
 is hazardous
as a result
 nations must forbid its use
instead
 of other renewable
sources
such
 as hydroelectric and solar
energy
 because they are cheap,clean
also
 renewable.
In contrast
, l disagree because those
sources
 are not 100 per cent effective as they are affected by drought and other weather changes.
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