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You work in an international company. You need to take some time off work. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter:  explain why you need this time off  give details of when you want this time off  say who can do your work when you are away

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Dear Mr. Smith I am writing
this
 missive to request you, to allow me
take
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 a short break from
work
 as I am going through mental trauma after my father's death. His death has caused me immense pain which I did not anticipate
initially
. But now as days
are passing
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, it has become difficult for me to focus on
work
. I need
this
 time to settle emotionally and mentally. I want to start the break
from
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next month as I will be able to finish my current project by
then
.
Moreover
, I will
also
 be able to
handover
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hand over
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 my
work
 to Paul who has been assisting me
from
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past
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 three months and understand my line of
work
. I want one
month
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month's
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 leave as I will be
joing
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joining
doing
 a meditation
center
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 in Shimla. I assure you that I will resume my
work
 from 1st September
,
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 2024. I hope you understand my mental state and allow me to take
break
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a break
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 for one month. I look forward
for
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to
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 your reply. Thank you
Your
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 sincerely, Bindiya Gupta
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suitable writing tone
Consider revising some phrases for improved formality. For example, instead of 'I am going through mental trauma', you could say 'I have been experiencing emotional distress.'
coherence
Ensure clarity by breaking up long sentences. Use shorter, succinct sentences to express your thoughts more clearly, especially when describing the details of your leave and who will handle your work.
complete response
The letter provides a comprehensive explanation of why the leave is needed, which contributes to a higher task achievement score.
greeting and closing
Your closing is very polite and professional, which leaves a positive impression.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • requesting time off
  • minimal disruption
  • capable colleague
  • cover responsibilities
  • workload management
  • urgent tasks
  • accessible
  • considering your request
  • contribute more effectively
  • appreciate
  • temporary absence
  • proactive planning
  • smooth transition
  • alternative arrangement
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