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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the weekly
expenditure
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 of the
families
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family's
families'
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 income in one country for the years 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, food had higher expenditures in both the years across all categories compared to
fuel
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 and
power
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. A notable trend is that during 2018 food, housing, and leisure were very similar,
while
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 the least amounts spent were in the
fuel
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 and
power
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category
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during
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between
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 1968 and 2018. In the year 1968, the food
category
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 accounted for the highest
expenditure
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, with 35% of the weekly income spent.
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 was followed by spending on housing, clothing, and footwear, with approximately 10%. Household goods, personal goods, leisure, and transport
was
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 the next highest
category
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, with roughly 7.5%. The least amount was spent on the
fuel
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 and
power
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category
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, with just over 5%. In the year 2018, the highest
expenditure
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 was on the leisure
category
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, with well over 20% spent. Housing was the next highest, with around 18% spent. Spending on transport was the next highest
expenditure
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, with just under 15%. The least
expenditure
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 was in the personal goods and the
fuel
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 and
power
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category
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, standing at around 4%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, fuel, power, category with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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