The graph below gives information about the percentages of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information about the percentages of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
The provided line chart depicts the percentages of people living in cities, it includes four
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countries, including Phillippines,
Malaysia
, Thailand and Indonesia. The timeframe of the graph itself
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between 1970 and 2020, with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040. At a glance
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the graph, the highest number of population that live in cities
at the end
of the timeframe are
Malaysia
, Indonesia, Thailand, and Phillippines, with
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approximate value of 80, 60, 57, and 48
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.
Malaysia
's trend
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pretty stable from 1970 to 2040, with some surge after 2000 reaching around 60 percent.
Furthermore
,
Malaysia
's
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are quite similar to
Indonesia
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. In 2000, the number of people skyrocketed and
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the other two countries, with almost 40
percent
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of people
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in the metropolis. Thailand
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the Phillipines
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Phillipines
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Philippines
have almost identical
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,
by
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surging
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in number
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number
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numbers
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until 2000, and slowly
decrease
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decreasing
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until 2010. Both
also
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an uptrend until 2040.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • changes over time
  • comparison
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • urbanization
  • developed countries
  • developing countries
  • rural areas
  • metropolitan areas
  • migration
  • industrialization
  • environmental impact
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