MamadjonovSamandar: The graph below shows four countries of residence pf overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant

MamadjonovSamandar:

The graph below shows four countries of residence pf overseas students in Australia. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant
The line graph illustrates
students
from Indonesia,
Hong
Kong
, Malaysia and
Singapore
living in
Australia
.
Overall
, the
number
of
students
living in
Australia
increased over the years. The highest
number
of student residences are from Indonesia. Even though most Malaysian
students
were living in the beginning, it ended up being the country which has the least
number
of
students
in
Australia
.
Hong
Kong
, Indonesia and
Singapore
had almost equal numbers of resident
students
nearly 1000 in 1982.
Hong
Kong
and
Singapore
maintained the same
number
until the year 1987.
Thereafter
,
Hong
Kong
's
number
rapidly increased surpassing the
number
of Indonesian
students
and reaching up to ten thousand
students
in 1992. Meanwhile, the
number
of
students
from
Singapore
gradually increased to
end up
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near twenty-thousand and mark the second-highest
number
of
students
in
Australia
. Indonesian
students
,
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steadily rose up until 1994 and got rapidly increased by 1998.
Thereafter
it got reduced in
number
to end up just above twenty-thousand
students
.
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