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MamadjonovSamandar: The graph below shows four countries of residence pf overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant

MamadjonovSamandar: The graph below shows four countries of residence pf overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant
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The line chart illustrates four nations ( Indonesia, Hong
kong
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Kong
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, Malaysia, and Singapore)of international residence pf in Australia between 1982 and 2000.
Number
 of students in thousands.
Overall
, Hong Kong
was
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had
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 the highest
number
 of visitors in Australia.
While in
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In
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 the
beginning
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beginning,
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 Malaysia
was
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had
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 the highest
number
 of
tourist
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tourists
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. In 1982 the
number
 of Malaysia visitors under 10000
then
 increased to nearly double just under 20000 in 1997 before it dropped to about 18000 in 2000. Singapore visitors started
about
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at about
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 1000
then
 increased gradually to 20000 in the
last
 year. The
number
 of
Indonesia
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Indonesian
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 tourists was around 1000 in 1982,
then
 by 1998 it had increased to a peak
about
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of about
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 35000
then
 declined to 25000 in 2000.
Moreover
, there was a significant
flucatuated
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fluctuated
fluctuate
 in the
number
Hong
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of Hong
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 Kong
visitorsover
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visitors over
 the given period, it started at under 1000
then
 increased to around 8000 in 1988
then
 reached around 18000 in 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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