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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of tourists visiting a Caribbean
island
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 between 2010 and 2017.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
although
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 the total
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
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cruise
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a cruise
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ship
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ships
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 and on
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island
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the island
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 fluctuated
in
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several times, the
figures
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 for total
people
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 soared significantly
at the end
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 of
7-year
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the 7-year
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 period. At the
begining
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beginning
,
in
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of
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 2010,
while
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 roughly 250000
people
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 stayed on
cruise
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 ships, approximately 750000
people
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 preferred to stay on
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island
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the island
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. Over the next three years, the
figures
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 for
people
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stayed
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staying
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 on
ship
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the ship
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 and on
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island
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the island
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 doubled and reached
to
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500000 and 1.5
million
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visitors
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, respectively.
Consequently
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, the total
number
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 of tourists reached 2
million
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people
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 in 2013. Over the next
2 years
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2-year
 period (from 2013 to 2015), as the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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 ships increased dramatically to over a
million
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people
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, the
figures
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 for travelers
stayed
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staying
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 on
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island
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the island
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 remained constant, at 1.5
million
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visitors
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.
However
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, the total
number
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 of
visitors
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 exceeded 2.5
million
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people
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. After 2015, even though the
figures
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 for both
was
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were
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 changeable
nonetheless
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 the total
number
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 of
visitors
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 remained stable.
Finally
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, in 2017, 3.5
million
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of
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apply
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people
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 visited
this
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 specific Caribbean
island
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 and 2
million
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 of these chose to stay on
cruise
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 ships and others preferred to
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island
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the island
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, visitors, cruise, figures, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 5 times.
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