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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the
number
 of tourists visiting a Caribbean
island
 between 2010 and 2017.
Overall
, it can be seen that
although
 the total
number
 of
visitors
 staying on
cruise
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a cruise
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ship
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ships
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 and on
island
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the island
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 fluctuated
in
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several times, the
figures
 for total
people
 soared significantly
at the end
 of
7-year
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the 7-year
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 period. At the
begining
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beginning
,
in
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of
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 2010,
while
 roughly 250000
people
 stayed on
cruise
 ships, approximately 750000
people
 preferred to stay on
island
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the island
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. Over the next three years, the
figures
 for
people
stayed
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staying
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 on
ship
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the ship
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 and on
island
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the island
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 doubled and reached
to
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500000 and 1.5
million
visitors
, respectively.
Consequently
, the total
number
 of tourists reached 2
million
people
 in 2013. Over the next
2 years
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2-year
 period (from 2013 to 2015), as the
number
 of
visitors
 staying on
cruise
 ships increased dramatically to over a
million
people
, the
figures
 for travelers
stayed
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staying
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 on
island
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the island
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 remained constant, at 1.5
million
visitors
.
However
, the total
number
 of
visitors
 exceeded 2.5
million
people
. After 2015, even though the
figures
 for both
was
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were
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 changeable
nonetheless
 the total
number
 of
visitors
 remained stable.
Finally
, in 2017, 3.5
million
of
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people
 visited
this
 specific Caribbean
island
 and 2
million
 of these chose to stay on
cruise
 ships and others preferred to
island
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the island
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, visitors, cruise, figures, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 5 times.
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