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The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates changes in the monetary
value
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 (price per ounce) of three selected precious metals between 2013 and 2021. An initial analysis reveals that Palladium showed a higher increase in
value
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 over the period analyzed.  
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while
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 Gold and Palladium exhibited increased
value
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, platinum experienced a slight decline.   Palladium started at the least valuable price of 700 S per once, dropping from 2013 to 2016 to approximately 600 S. After that, it rose significantly to 1000 S by 2018, peaking as the most valuable precious metal in 2021 at nearly 2500 S.
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, Platinum began as the highest-priced metal in 2013 at 1500 S per oz, but steadily decreased from 2014 onwards, ending at 1000 S by 2021.   Meanwhile, Gold started at around 1500 S per oz in 2013, and dipped slightly until 2015 to just over 1000 S.
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, it maintained a relatively stable
value
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 from 2016 to 2018 with approximately 1300 S, and
then
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 afterwards exhibited a significant increase from 2019 to 2021, reaching almost 1700 S per oz.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words value with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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