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living a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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Living in a country where you ought to
convey
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speak
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 a foreign
language
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 can indeed result in serious social dilemmas
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 practical obstacles.
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 essay will clarify the nuances that matter
these
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in these
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 adverse situations.
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communication barriers
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 social reasons come into view.
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,
relationship
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 between a person who cannot declare the
language
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 clearly or a person who cannot explain himself/herself
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 the locals will be difficult. Cultural misunderstandings will arise, as, not understanding the specific nuances of the
language
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 can lead to misunderstandings, leading to a loss of social connection.
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, two or more people express the same jargon,
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 they mean or realize different things.
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, these two reasons above can bring
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 and stereotyping, which will have a negative impact on the adaptation process.
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,
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 situation, which creates practical troubles, can origin difficulties in daily activities.
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, when you don't have
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language
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of language
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 skills, everything from shopping to banking, health check-ups and so on becomes challenging.
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, it may have a poor effect on the career limit, i.e. a number of job advertisements require the local
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 at a professional level, and if the speaking is insufficient, unemployment may appear, which will put a person in a difficult situation economically. Even if you have visited their country or have to live there, it is imperative that you speak the
language
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 as
fluent
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 as they do. As an example, we can give the Romans, so
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 their saying; if you go
elsewhere
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, as they do there. I don't agree with
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 idea if you come to my motherland you should learn my
language
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 first because learning the
language
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 is a time-consuming task, the most vital thing for me is to make an effort.
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, not knowing
their
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 dialect
in
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 the homey you are going to or staying in can bring some disputes that will end up in unforgettable things in your life.
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coherence cohesion
The essay needs a clearer introduction and conclusion. Make sure to present the main argument more explicitly in the introductory paragraph and summarize the main points clearly in the conclusion.
task achievement
Try to develop each main point with more detailed explanations and relevant examples. This will strengthen your argument and make your essay more convincing.
task achievement
The essay addresses both social and practical problems that can occur when living in a foreign country, showing a clear understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
There is a good attempt to explore different aspects of the topic, including cultural misunderstandings and practical challenges.

Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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