The chart below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The chart below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
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The line charts
illustrates
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proportions
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the proportions
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of
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households
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house holds
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households
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owning
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washing machines, refrigerators and vacuum
cleanners
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cleaners
while
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the
time
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they used for
house work
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housework
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during
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during
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time
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period from 1920 to 2019 As can be clearly seen from the graph, the total spending
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utensils witnessed a
trong
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strong
surge, the opposite was true for the
time
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quantity.
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, refrigerators and
acuum
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vacuum
gained substantial popularity. As the graph
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, in 1920, very few households in
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country had refrigerators, with the figure standing at about 0%. The amount of
fridge
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fridges
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peaked dramatically at 100% by 1980 and remained stable until 2019.
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, the figure for vacuum
cleanners
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cleaners
started at 30% and reached a peak of 100% in 2000. The number of
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levelled off by 2019.
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, the percentage of households with washing machines increased slightly between 1920 and 1960 from 40% to 70%. During a period of 20 years, dipping by around 5% and hit a
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of 70% in 2019. As regards the second graph, the amount of
time
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spent on housework including washing clothes, preparing meals and
cleanning
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cleaning
started at 50 hours in 1920. The figure
then
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fell sharply to 20 hours 40 years later. After 1960, it went down slowly, accounting for nearly 10%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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