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Band 5.5

Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project helshe is doing about celebrating New Year in different countries. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter say how important New Year is to people in your country describe how New Year is celebrated in your country explain what you like about New Year celebrations in your country

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Dear Shally, I hope you are doing well. In your previous letter, you
had
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asked me about how New
Year
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 is celebrated here in India. People, in my country are very enthusiastic about New
Year
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 as
this
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 day marks the beginning of
fresh
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a fresh
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year
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, bringing happiness and prosperity in their life.
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, New
Year
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 is followed by Baishakhi which is celebrated for the cultivation of new
crop
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. So, the emotion begins
from
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on
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the
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New
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Year
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Year's
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 Day. In urban cities, people usually go
for
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parties to clubs and
bar
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bars
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 to celebrate
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 day.
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, in
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the countryside
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countryside
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countryside,
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 families gather to celebrate it and cook sweet dishes with the belief that
this
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 sweetness will make their coming
year
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 more
cherish able
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. I, particularly like the whole emotion which starts with Christmas and continues till the New
Year
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.
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, the fireworks at India Gate
is
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are
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 one big event which I always look forward
.
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 I hope all of the required information I have given you, yet you want more knowledge about it, feel free to contact me. Give my regards to
aunty
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Aunty
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 and
uncle
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Uncle
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. Love Bindiya

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complete response
Try to elaborate more on specific customs or traditions unique to your country to provide a more comprehensive answer.
logical structure
Consider breaking down larger paragraphs into smaller ones, each focusing on a single idea to enhance clarity.
suitable writing tone
Your letter has a very warm and friendly tone, which is suitable for a letter to a friend.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are appropriately used and add to the friendliness of the letter.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Reflection
  • Goal setting
  • Traditions
  • Customs
  • Public celebrations
  • Fireworks displays
  • Unique local traditions
  • Communal
  • Familial
  • Prosperity
  • Festive atmosphere
  • Resolution
  • Good wishes
  • Exchanging gifts
  • Cultural and social differences
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