The graph below shows the average time spent by four car manufacturers to produce vehicles at their US factories. Bạn đã gửi

The graph below shows the average time spent by four car manufacturers to produce vehicles at their US factories. Bạn đã gửi
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the information about
average
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the average
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hours to produce cars in the US in the period
7
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years from 1998 to 2005
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in 1998
general
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General Motor
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motor
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and Honda had
downward
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trend, opposite
Ford
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, Toyota tended to increase in average time spent
to produce
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vehicles. Between 1998 and 2001, the hours to produce cars in two car manufacturers :
Ford
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and Toyota
slight increase
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about 28% to 31,4% for
Ford
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, 22% to 22,5% and
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to 21,7%.Opposite, the average time spent to produce vehicles in general
motor
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, Honda had tended to decrease 32% to 27,6% for general
motor
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, 22% to 20% and next slight increase 21,8%. From 2002 to 2005, the common points in 4 car manufacturers to produce cars in the US is reducing time spent to produce vehicles ,25,7%to 22% for general
motor
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, 29,6% to 21,8% for
Ford
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, 23,8% to 20% for Toyota and Honda is 23,6% to 20% respectively
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words motor, ford with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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