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illustrate
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illustrates

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the information about
average
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the average

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hours to produce cars in the US in the period
7
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of 7

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years from 1998 to 2005
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start
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starting

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in 1998
general
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General Motor

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motor
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and Honda had
downward
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a downward

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trend, opposite
Ford
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, Toyota tended to increase in average time spent
to produce
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producing

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vehicles. Between 1998 and 2001, the hours to produce cars in two car manufacturers :
Ford
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and Toyota
slight increase
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slightly increased

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about 28% to 31,4% for
Ford
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, 22% to 22,5% and
then
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reduce
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reduced

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to 21,7%.Opposite, the average time spent to produce vehicles in general
motor
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, Honda had tended to decrease 32% to 27,6% for general
motor
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, 22% to 20% and next slight increase 21,8%. From 2002 to 2005, the common points in 4 car manufacturers to produce cars in the US is reducing time spent to produce vehicles ,25,7%to 22% for general
motor
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, 29,6% to 21,8% for
Ford
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, 23,8% to 20% for Toyota and Honda is 23,6% to 20% respectively

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words motor, ford with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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