The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
The bar chart indicates the
coffee
and tea purchasing and consuming habits of Australian citizens in five
cities
during the
last
4 weeks.
Overall
, it is apparent that the majority of Australians were really into going to café to buy
coffee
and tea, which accounted for 57% of the total figure on average, followed by the habits of buying
instant
coffee
and fresh ones respectively. Except for Adelaine where the data of
instant
coffee
consumers was leading. On one hand, Melbourne and Hobart were two
cities
that had the largest proportion of people wanting to buy
coffee
and tea at café, which was 64% in both
cities
.
While
on the other hand
, Adelaine tended to have the smallest percentage, which was only 49%. In
case
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of the habit of buying
instant
coffee
, Hobart still had the dominating position. To be more specific, there was 54% of Hobart’s clients had the habit of consuming packaged
coffee
in
this
period.
While
Hobart was dominating in
this
category
last
month, Sydney was at the bottom of
this
group, where the data of
instant
coffee
consumers was only 45%.
However
, Sydney had the highest percentage of those who were keen on fresh
coffee
, which was 43% in the
last
4 weeks. At the same time, the proportion of fresh
coffee
clients in Brisbane accounted for only 34%, which was the lowest among
five
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cities
.
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