Some people say that the bicycles are a good, modern means of transportation. Other say riding a bicycle has clear disadvantages. Discuss both view points and give your own opinion.

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Many believe that
bicycles
are
good
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option to travel from one place to another for
its
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obvious benefit to
environment
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the environment
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and health.
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contrast, others say it has its own disadvantage
due to
its lack of
practical
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a practical
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approach. I support the latter opinion as
bicycles
do not provide a complete solution.
This
essay will discuss both
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perspectives.
To begin
with, there is no doubt that
bicycles
are
modern
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a modern
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means of transport due
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to its
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its
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their
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eco-friendly quality. They do not have any detrimental effect on
environment
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the environment
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because they do
no
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not
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omit any harmful fumes
unlike
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, unlike
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cars or motorbikes.
Additionally
,
bicycles
are advantageous for human health as it is a good way of burning calories which
help
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helps
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individuals to lose weight leading to
healthier
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a healthier
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life.
On the contrary
,
demerits
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the demerits
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of
bicycles
cannot be overlooked as these are slow means of transport and do not provide protection against
accident
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. In today's
fast paced
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world, time is the most valuable commodity and
bicycles
are much slower when compared to other transport means like cars, metro or buses.
Thus
, they do not provide a practical approach to save time.
Moreover
,
bicycles
do not facilitate in case of any unforeseen circumstances like accidents or weather conditions. They make the rider vulnerable in
such
situation
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which may cause problems
to
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them.
Therefore
,
bicycles
cannot be taken as a better means of transportation. In conclusion, it can be argued that
bicycles
do provide a better solution when
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about environment and health yet
it
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they
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do not give a concrete solution in terms of safety and
time saving
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time-saving
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.
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Good job on presenting both viewpoints clearly before giving your opinion.
coherence cohesion
Introduction and conclusion are well-structured and serve their purpose effectively.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • eco-friendly
  • pollution
  • cost-effective
  • initial investment
  • maintenance costs
  • healthy lifestyle
  • form of exercise
  • congested urban areas
  • traffic jams
  • bypass gridlocks
  • limited protection
  • vulnerable to injuries
  • long-distance travel
  • transporting heavy loads
  • weather conditions
  • cycling infrastructure
  • uncomfortable
  • unsafe
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