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The graphs below show the number of visitors to two cities in a given year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the number of visitors to two cities in a given year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the
number
 of
visitors
of
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to
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 an island in
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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across
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from
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 2010 to 2017.
Overall
, there
is
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has been
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 a drastic increase in the
number
visitors
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of visitors
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 across the years, with a rapid
increas
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increase
 in the
number
 of tourists staying on the island and
steady
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a steady
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 increase
of
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in
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visitors
 on cruise ships.
To begin
 with, the
number
 of tourists increased drastically from 1
millions
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million
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 to over 2.5
millions
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million
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 in 2015,
then
 it went stagnant in 2016 and
then
rise
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rose
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 to the peak of 3.5
millions
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million
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 in 2017.
Then
, there
was
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were
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 under 1
millions
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million
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 cruise
ships
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ship
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visitors
 from 2010 to 2011, but there
is
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was
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 a sudden surge after 2011 to 1.5
millions
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million
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 in 2013. The
number
 remains relatively stable throughout the years
except
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except for
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 a drop to nearly 1.2
millions
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million
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 in 2016.
On the other hand
, the
number
 of on-land
visitors
 remained under 0.5
million
 with
slight
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a slight
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 fluctuation from 2010 to 2013, but it rose continuously and drastically from 0.5
million
 in 0.5
million
 to 2
million
 in 2017, replacing cruise ships as the most favoured mode of travel in the
islan
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island
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, millions, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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