Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.
In my opinion, it depends on what poorer
countries
need to deloveped
their country. Some poorer Correct your spelling
delivered
countries
need financial aid to slove
their poverty and some Correct your spelling
solve
countries
need the supplier. As you can see, during Covid
pandemic poorer Correct article usage
the Covid
countries
highly need supporting
from the rich Replace the word
support
countries
. Thus
, some poorer countries
need Covid-nineteenth
Correct your spelling
COVID-19
vaccination
and medical Fix the agreement mistake
vaccinations
supply
to offer to their people and some need financial aid to support their Fix the agreement mistake
supplies
country
Change noun form
country's
economic
Replace the word
economy
while
they were
lockdown so most of the Verb problem
are in
countries
affected
not only poorer Add a missing verb
are affected
countries
. For example
: In
Cambodia which is Change preposition
apply
the
developing country Correct article usage
a
so
Correct word choice
apply
they
Correct pronoun usage
apply
need
the money flow from the rich Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
countries
to support their economic
leading to Replace the word
economy
attract
investors and Wrong verb form
attracting
consequences
to get more potential and Replace the word
consequently
opportunity
to Fix the agreement mistake
opportunities
offering
people Change the form of the verb
offer
to get
Verb problem
apply
job
in order to improve their GDP. Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
Furthermore
, they either
need Correct word choice
apply
supporting
from tourism from the rich Replace the word
support
countries
because eighty percent of income comes from tourists so turism
is Correct your spelling
tourism
entire
part of Add an article
an entire
the entire
economy
so it is Correct article usage
the economy
also
another type of helping
.
Replace the word
help
To sum up
, it is not correct or wrong to offer money to poorer countries
. The important thing is what type that rich countries
can help poorer counties
and the word "people need" which Correct your spelling
countries
is showing
the path to help.Wrong verb form
shows
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grammar
Improve grammatical accuracy and spelling, for instance, 'developed' instead of 'deloveped' and 'solve' instead of 'slove'.
coherence
Enhance the introduction and conclusion by clearly stating your stance at the beginning and summarizing your key points explicitly at the end.
support
Enrich your essay with more specific examples and details to support your arguments. For instance, provide more concrete data on how financial aid has helped or failed.
cohesion
Work on the logical flow of your sentences and ideas. Use more cohesive devices to link your ideas smoothly.
task response
The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a balanced view on the issue.
relevance
The points about COVID-19 and Cambodia are appropriate and relevant.
depth
You have made a good attempt to discuss both sides of the argument, which adds depth to your essay.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.