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University education should be free for all stuents.To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#university #education #stuents
whether university
education
 should be provided free of cost to all
students
 or not , has been a matter of grave concern. I firmly believe that university
education
 ought
not
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 be free for all
students
due to
 economic and social reasons.
To begin
 with, the first and
formost
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foremost
 aspect that
fee
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fees
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waived
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are waived
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off
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apply
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for university
studentsis
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students
students is
 associated with many issues.To explain it, the
all
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apply
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burden of fees and infrastructure would be on
government's
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the government's
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 shoulders. The result of
this
 would lead
scarcity
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to scarcity
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 of funds for remaining sectors
such
health
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as health
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 and transport.
For example
 , in India as
developing
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a developing
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nations
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nation
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, authorities are unable to provide free
education
 to all
students
 with their limited budget.The same problem has been
facing
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 by other Asian developing nations.
furthermore
, despite having easy access for
sall
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all
student
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students
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, free higher
education
 would come with few educational facilities.To
elobrate
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illustrate
 it , if
education
association
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associations
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 serve free college
education
 to all pupiles , they would
be not be
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not be
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 keen to
acess
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access
 modern or
upto
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up-to-date
education
structure
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structures
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, which can cope with stiff global
compeition
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competition
 in
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the furture
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furture
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future
.
Thus
, the
students
 of
such
 institutions would be unable to match their
skill
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skills
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 with
demanding
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the demanding
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enviroments
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environments
environment
 of
education
.
To conclude
,
although
 free
education
 is
right
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the right
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 of every
students
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student
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, waived
off
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apply
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fees for higher study would
be caused
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cause
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 of burden on
government
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the government
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 budget ,and have limited scope
of
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for
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 improvement.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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