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Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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experimentation which are tested on animals should be prohibited, others assume that animal testing is vital for
research
 for mankind. Animals are part of our
ecosytem
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ecosystem
 which forms a cycle to continue our livelihood as each component is dependent on others. I believe that experiments on wildlife creatures should be banned and governments should implement strict actions to overcome
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. In
this
 contemporary world, everyone is trying to
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 and secure
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previous
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 times.
This
 involves creating antidotes during pandemics or practising theories for any potential risk in the future.
Pleothra
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Plethora
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organization
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 investing their resources
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 birds and mammals as an
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 to human beings.
For instance
,
snakes
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 venom is required to cure acute diseases which often end up taking their life.
Additionally
, bats and pigs are often chosen to create antibacterial medicines. Fishes are often killed to produce rare
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 present in them which
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 for chronic diseases. Most of these experiments
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hit
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and
trial
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 method as their
procdeure
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procedure
. All of these findings could be reduced if artificial intelligence can be deeply explored as the study
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 us create optimal solutions for upcoming times
while
 considering patterns in the past.
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government
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 can help fund these laboratories to expand their
research
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 generating methods which
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 no species
of being
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research
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To conclude
, I believe that testing on animals should be stopped as it affects the lifecycle.
Government
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 and organizations should work together to bring alternate methods rather than experimenting on creatures.
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task achievement
Your essay addresses both viewpoints of the prompt and presents your own stance. However, it would benefit from a clearer structure and more developed main points. Focus on expanding each idea with detailed examples and explanations.
coherence cohesion
The logical flow can be improved. Currently, some ideas are disjointed and abrupt. Ensure that each paragraph connects smoothly to the next. Using transition words and phrases will help in creating a seamless flow.
task achievement
Inserting more specific examples related to modern research or historical contexts can strengthen your arguments. Try to provide concrete instances which support your stance.
task achievement
Your conclusion clearly restates your position and suggests solutions, which effectively wraps up the essay.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction does well to set up the context and present both sides of the argument.
task achievement
You address the ethical issues regarding animal experimentation, which adds depth to your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific breakthroughs
  • ethical concerns
  • alternatives
  • animal testing
  • moral implications
  • ethical considerations
  • vivisection
  • research methods
  • ethical dilemmas
  • animal welfare
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