The chart below gives information about how families in one country spend their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
The given bar chart provides the information of an average weekly various aspects of expenditures spent by families in one country in 1968 and 2018, indicated as
a percentages
.
Correct the article-noun agreement
a percentage
percentages
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that the majority of their incomes was
largely spent on Change the verb form
were
thing
that pleasure us Fix the agreement mistake
things
such
as food and leisure, whereas
that
energy was funded the least. Correct determiner usage
apply
However
, it is interesting to note the trends of prioritized funding was
shifted Verb problem
have
where
people Correct word choice
and
seems
to prefer Change the verb form
seem
leisures
over their meals Fix the agreement mistake
leisure
in
five decades later.
Starting in 1968, at 35% Food was the highest Change preposition
apply
percentages
among other categories, followed by housing and clothing and Fix the agreement mistake
percentage
footware
, at 10% which was spent Correct your spelling
footwear
in
the same rate.Change preposition
at
While
Fuel and power was
the given the fewest amount of slightly over 5%, others remaining groups Change the verb form
were
was
around 7-8%.
Change the verb form
were
In fifty
Change preposition
Fifty
yeears
later, the expenses on free time activities outnumbered its previous top priority at 22% followed by that of housing at 19%, Correct your spelling
years
while
that of Food dropped least
than half of its past figures, at 16%. Replace the word
less
Additionally
, personal goods has
Change the verb form
have
accompained
with that Correct your spelling
accompanied
of
fuel and power for the smallest proportion of expenses at about 4%.Change preposition
apply
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