The chart below gives information about how families in one country spend their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spend their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
The given bar chart provides the information of an average weekly various aspects of expenditures spent by families in one country in 1968 and 2018, indicated as
a percentages
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a percentage
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.
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that the majority of their incomes
was
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largely spent on
thing
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things
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that pleasure us
such
as food and leisure,
whereas
that
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energy was funded the least.
However
, it is interesting to note the trends of prioritized funding
was
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shifted
where
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and
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people
seems
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to prefer
leisures
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leisure
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over their meals
in
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five decades later. Starting in 1968, at 35% Food was the highest
percentages
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percentage
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among other categories, followed by housing and clothing and
footware
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footwear
, at 10% which was spent
in
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the same rate.
While
Fuel and power
was
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were
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the given the fewest amount of slightly over 5%, others remaining groups
was
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around 7-8%.
In fifty
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yeears
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years
later, the expenses on free time activities outnumbered its previous top priority at 22% followed by that of housing at 19%,
while
that of Food dropped
least
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than half of its past figures, at 16%.
Additionally
, personal goods
has
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accompained
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accompanied
with that
of
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fuel and power for the smallest proportion of expenses at about 4%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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